Show vs. Tell Entry

 July 13, 2012 -Show vs. Tell Entry-

     Beforehand, a loud thud hitting a wall came from a wrecking ball just within earshot of where Clarity was studying at the library….

     To be shocked and jolted out of a depressive stupor from that wrecking ball’s thud felt like my upper chest in the form of a river dam had just been knocked away, resulting in a sea of sloshing rain water, spilling into river water, with a torrent of fresh fallen leaves doing a strange dance as they settled downstream…  After the fact, the librarian put up a sign that there would be nearby construction for the rest of the day. 

     …No more depressive state, no more reverie, that virtual impact at the back of my chest reminded me of just how a sudden noise in a place so silent could make me feel like I’m in the middle of a river unleashed from an impactful, pounding thud!

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